ABELOroz

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This is a work from Abel Oroz, Spain.
You can find his beautiful work right here: http://abeloroz.blogspot.com/
This is what we think of this piece called: Gamepitch.
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story
I think the main issue with this image is the missing story. And a story can be as much as a sense of time or place or a captured moment in time of a little bug that crawls out of a tree to smell the morning dew or bringing a fresh spring leaf back home.

color
It has some nice color, but it doesn't support the story; It is saturated in places where my eyes don't find some sort of satisfaction or closure although they scream for attention. for example: My eyes are following the green grass to the right to find...nothing really.

composition
Framing is much easier if you know what you want the viewer to see or to look at.

My conclusion: adding a story definetely helps and let the environment (with its atmosphere) be a stage to the story.

This first image shows a black and white version of the original version to check value. A lot of people work from black and white and turn it to color later on. If you feel more comfortable starting your work in color, I think it is as practical to check your artwork for values along the way.

The second image is to show what I mean. The composition is now more staging the event or the story and not leading the eye all over the place (in the original you see very bright spots in places where my eye doesn't want to be and framing can also be done differently now). Now, the path leads the eye towards a small, detailed and high contrast story where my eye finds closure. Adding this story, however small, doesn't make it a totally different image, but a stronger one.
-M-

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